This is by far the shortest story I’ve written to date, penned a couple of months ago on the tube. Along the fairy tale narrative, inspired by Rapunzel, I wish I could say it follows some deep and meaningful subject or true event, but honestly, it isn’t. It just made me laugh.
Mortal Mia
Princess Mia climbed over the ledge of an open window to jump from her tower, the prison that had held her captive for years untold. She vied for the freedom of open meadows, to ride on horseback, to taste the sweet cherry kiss of a handsome man clad in tights and glistening armour, and to ride into the sunset, where she would at long last live happily ever after with darling little children in another great tower. And there, far below her, a bold young gent held out his arms with a valiant grin and great bulging biceps. She would fall through the air with her thick dark hair billowing in the wind, and all her dreams would blossom on landing in the arms of her dashing Prince Charming.
It’s a shame he couldn’t catch.
A Thought or Two 
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Short and funny.
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I enjoyed this! But I think you should keep the character as Rapunzel with her long hair. It is fun to “twist” the classic fairy tale and make something new. I did this with The Goose that Laid Golden Eggs.
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Thanks for reading! I’m thinking of possibly extending it a little, would love to hear your feedback on some other pieces I’ve done!
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The final line might create a stronger image if you said, “It’s a shame he didn’t catch her.”
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Hi Shaun, if you would like to read my retelling of The Goose that Laid the Golden Egg, here is the link: https://christopherjohnlindsay.wordpress.com/2017/02/25/the-greedy-goose-that-laid-golden-eggs/
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Depending on how far the fall was, even if he’d caught her, they’d probably both have been killed, or at least badly injured. Fairy tale meet physics.
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Exactly my thought: take away “artistic license” and you get a totally different outcome!
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Love it !! This made me laugh so hard! Great job!
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Thank you so much for reading! Please do check out other bits I write, I’ll be posting more soon!
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heh, heh, heh….very witty and clever! I enjoyed this. it is very interesting that she wanted to “…..jump from her tower, the prison that had held her captive for years untold.” only to “….live happily ever after with darling little children in another great tower.” This too, I found clever!
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